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如果你已经做了一些功课的话,会知道在大学申请中最有挑战的工作之一就是完成留学文书的写作。为了在这一过程中帮助到你,我们在每年的9月1日前都会将上述学校的最新文书题目更新完毕并进行翻译。辅以我们的文书分类文书指南留学文书编辑器,会大大减低你的劳动量。我们正在着手进行的另外一个项目是从第一手英文资料翻译编辑一份更适合中国学生的美国大学院校指南

现在就点击名校地图院校筛选我的选校试试吧,也可以浏览以下这些示例看看。

文书指南
芝加哥文书
佐治亚理工文书
北卡教堂山文书
圣母文书
院校指南
芝加哥大学
加州大学伯克利
纽约大学
普渡大学
每天学写留学文书 2月23日

reluctant

释义: 形容词,表“不情愿的,勉强的”,在留学文书中可以作为unwilling的同义词和书面化形式进行替换,达到丰富词汇的目的。

例句:
Boeing was reluctant at first to follow suit, but last August it launched its own re-engined SANB airplane, the 737 MAX, with first deliveries scheduled for 2017.
School districts may be reluctant to provide intervention or special instruction for such children because they would not meet minimum qualifying criteria for services.

埃默里大学录取主文选之四

回答Common主文第五题

典型的西方白左居高临下,对比

I’m waiting in an air conditioned, mesquite smelling, leather booth restaurant, excited to hear about my supervisor’s trip to Malawi. She arrives and we sit down. We order lunch and talk a little about her project. I’m mid-sentence when she cuts me off. She has something to show me. She reaches into her purse, pulls something out, sets it on the table, pushes it across. It’s a stack of pictures. I go through them one by one, but when I get to the last photo I stop. My vision blurs and I have to put the pictures down.

It was a man standing in front of a wooden paneled door, holding a sign that read, “We are open.” On the door behind him was a plaque: The Tony Bradshaw* Library. I couldn’t fathom it. Tangible recognition of all the work I’d done since Kindergarten. Not just some certificate. My name on the door of a library that will change people’s lives halfway across the world.

女童子军是很好的活动,“书荒”概念

I started as a Daisy Scout in Kindergarten, and for years my mom begged me to quit. “It’s just too much with everything else you have going on.” But I had the Gold Award in my sight, and I’d known what my project would be ever since I heard the words “book famine” in an NPR op-ed piece about Good Steward Global Initiative. I had heard about food famines, but never a book famine. The more I researched it, the more I appreciated the appropriateness of the phrase. People all over the world hunger for knowledge and literacy but lack the resources to satisfy their yearnings.

行动力

I reached out to Good Steward and offered to create a club that raises funds, collects books, spreads awareness of the importance of reading, and stimulates people to take action. I’m not sure how much the directors of Good Steward expected of me, but plunged headlong into the cause. Three years later, we’ve raised over $8,000 to establish new libraries. All my work culminated in an opportunity for me to travel to Africa with Good Steward the summer before my senior year.

环境描写,同样和开篇对比

When I look back on it now, my most vivid memory from that trip sees me sitting on the ground inside a plaster-walled, thatched-roof, dirt-floor library, reading a book to a group of children. I pause to take a breath and scan the room. Each and every child is beaming. I see that sparkle in their eyes, that inspiration sparkle, that sparkle of happiness. A simple story time, something my dad and I did every night when I was their age, is like Christmas morning for them. That sparkle reaffirms everything I have been working towards.

其实我觉对这种沾沾自喜挺不以为然的,不过美国招生官就是喜欢,所以没办法

I learned multiple lessons on that trip. For the children in that library, education is a privilege. For me it was something taken for granted. I also got to add the final piece to the puzzle, to create the full picture. I’d heard that a library could turn a child from Malawi into a college graduate, but I hadn’t gotten to see it. I hadn’t gotten to feel the overwhelming pride and gratitude that comes from that sparkle. Now I have, and I can’t stop feeling it myself.

AADPS陈欣老师点评:这篇文章的环境描写写得非常好,值得大家仔细钻研模仿。我在指导文书的时候,常常发现大家只给出骨架,但是对类似“肉”的环境描写、人物描写、细节描写之类重视程度不够。事实上这些写好了,比什么都强,而且很真实诚恳。

当然小姑娘直接略过三年怎么筹到八千美元的,其实我猜猜可能也是个很好的技巧。估计她爸妈朋友直接一人捐了一千五吧,然后再零散凑了一些。真要说美国去非洲的机票也不是很便宜了,怎么也没见捐出来……所以该略写的就略写,不过如果你真的凭本事筹钱,我还是建议好好展开写下。

招生官点评:这篇文书有一种独特的洞察力,让我们充分了解学生对细节的关注水平。任何读者很快就会发现这位申请者在谦卑、社会服务、驱动力和坚韧之间存在着良好的平衡和互相激励。学生正面应对一个问题(“书荒”),并且明白不能单单流于表面、浅尝则止。对问题进行深入处理的决心是显而易见的,对此事的看法及其价值观也很清楚。 最后,文章末尾的反思非常不错,让读者认可这个学生有很大的潜力。毫无疑问这些潜力在我校的悉心培养下能被发扬光大。

重要通知

本文由AADPS编译自https://blog.emoryadmission.com/2018/08/strong-personal-statements-part-4/,原始发布地址是https://aadps.net/2019/14443.html

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