陈欣老师美本留学文书选(CommonApp转学一):计算机+医科=>数学+商科

在诸多早年的转学文书中选出这一篇有好几个原因。这并不是一篇炫技的文字,但是很好的体现了转学文书里的所有重要元素。学员并非从一所美国大学转到另一所,而是从国内普通高校转到前三十的美国名校。学员也并非是继续就读本专业,而是在转学的过程中挑战全新的专业。

不同与常规申请的留学主文书,转学文书会显得更加程式化一些。作为读者的招生官最关心的问题是转学的动机以及申请者能否在新环境中取得成功(一般而言会是继续以往的成功)。当然素材的分配也非常重要——Common文书里不能把所有的材料都一股脑用完,导致在学校特定的文书里无话可说。与此同时,Common转学文书不针对任何特定学校,但也需要能和学校的转学文书遥相呼应。

如果申请者是一个比较有特色的孩子或者想强调一下与欲转入专业的联系,开头这种白描式的手法是我所推荐的,可以在不多的篇幅中把转学的动机引入进来。相对的,我不太推荐写太多对于现在环境和学业的负面感受或反馈,因为并不知道读者会做何种解读。

转学文书里,对目前的学业一定要有充分的涉及和讨论。所提及的课程应该与成绩单和教授推荐信对应上。除此之外,可以像文中一样适当体现自己对专业知识的领悟和应用,以及在好奇心激励下对未知领域的主动探索。一般如果有与专业相关的活动,也应该有所提及(对于这位学员,我们商量后把相关的内容放到了学校文书里)。

毋庸置疑,很多转学生可能在原来大学走过种种弯路。对此我一般的建议是把复杂的故事讲简单。毕竟文书的650词说多不多,招生官对于每个个案花费的时间和精力也十分有限。在申请材料的准备中如何取舍,展现出哪一面,不分散乃至误导招生官的注意力,确实是一门艺术。

最后结尾处的论述涉及到了几个公认的美国大学优势——资源、多元化、自由。大家可以参考一下。当然一般而言,会根据自己申请目标(大U?藤校?理工学校?文理学院?商学院?)进一步定制并在学校文书里继续展开。


In my younger years, people often told me that I have “an amazing mind.” When I first learned to play the piano, I soon unveiled the secrets of harmony as the ratios between note frequencies. When I watched a dance performance with my parents, I could not help sharing my finding with them, that the pulsating movements were nothing but twisting numbers. Perhaps now I am no longer into those childish acts anymore, but I feel an ever-stronger intimacy with mathematics, something that is destined to accompany me for the rest of my life.

Due to the rigid higher education system in China, I was assigned to Computer Science major when I was admitted by (删去学校名). However, this did not prevent me from actively experiencing the charm of math. I was exhilarated by the ingenious method that estimates algorithm complexity before it is actually executed. Discrete Mathematics and Linear Algebra became two new favorites of mine, which have empowered me with modeling tools from graph to intrinsic vector. The only setback, I realized, was that most engaging topics were never fully covered by professors. So I audited Differential Equation and Complex Analysis, which were reserved solely for the math major. This turned out to pique my intellectual curiosity some more.

Eventually, my interests in math became unstoppable. Though with my accomplishments, I earned the rare qualification to enter the medical school, I did the unthinkable and forfeited the opportunity by the first week of sophomore year. The choice was easier said than done, and I suffered from significant pressure from family, friends, and teachers. However, I have made up my mind and decided that my life would never be complete without spending some fruitful years with my true passion.

One of the few options available to me is to transfer to a college in the United States. After pondering for a long while, I believe it is the right choice. American universities boast superior educational resources, such as full-fledged libraries and comprehensive journal databases, all of which will help a scholar immensely in her journey toward the ultimate truth. Being an independent thinker and innovator, I also look forward to sharing my ideas with exceptional peers from all over the world, and we may even work together to illuminate unexplored frontier of human knowledge. In the meantime, I aspire to attain holistic development, taking advantage of the extra freedom, and striving to relate my learning to practice. A concrete academic pursuit like this will serve as the foundation of a promising business career, where the quantitative methods I acquire at school can benefit thousands, or even millions.

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