陈欣老师美本留学文书选(CommonApp主文一):科学、自然、哲学

提起理工男,人们心里立即会泛起在实验室埋头苦干、思维简单、不善交往的刻板印象。 这篇文书的主人可能会让你耳目一新。

他是一位特别有才华的孩子,喜欢摄影,喜欢读书,喜欢和小伙伴们一起玩耍,也喜欢自己一个人静静的思考哲学问题。闪亮的大眼睛时不时的闪现出新的灵感。

经过仔细讨论,我们决定以一次北极科考中不成功的小实验作为引子,写一写极地严酷而壮丽的自然景观给他的感触。短短六百余词的篇幅里,我们尽量既体现了科学的专业性,又通过细腻的环境描写展现了他的点滴感触,反思了自己乃至人类本身的定位。相信这种态度对他未来的科研实践也是颇有助益的。

在文书指导和反复修改的过程中。我们遇到的一个很大挑战就是最初的几版过于散漫,缺乏有效的逻辑组织。通过顺序的调整和一些提纲挈领句子的设计,逐渐改成了现在这一稿,构筑了一条清晰的主线,读起来更加明晰顺畅。

当然还要提醒大家注意,近年来,美国大学招生官的口味感觉更加务实。这种抒发个人感受和思考的文书,也一定要和其他的描述自己成就和实践的文书相结合,不能一味在申请中大写特写散文和议论文。


I was sixteen when my journey to the Arctic changed the way I see this world.

As we entered the Arctic Circle, I used the pendulum to measure the acceleration of gravity. Though I have tried every way to reduce interference, such as doing the experiment at 4am before the ship set sail, my plan was still spoiled by the constantly caress of the sea, so-called ocean swell. I could not smooth the non-linear waves with my equations so I was forced to give up the experiment with 6% error margin.

Serendipity was absent in my experiment. Upset and agitated, I took a stroll on board and looked far away. Under the golden radiance of the rising sun, snow mountains became a holy city which has no hunger or distress. Beside the ship a few whales surfaced to take breaths. The vapor they exhaled formed clouds in the sky. I saw those distant mountain range with an infinite sea, which have been there since the ancient past and will last in the distant future.

I was overwhelmed by the magnificent presence of nature, and my little tinkering was not unlike a proud kid showing off his arithmetic skills to a savant—so naïve, so ignorant. I used to think that there was nothing in the world that could not be parsed and fathomed by human intelligence, and I had been proud that I could solve physical and metaphysical problems with dazzling mind experiments and logic deductions. However, when I faced the phenomena of mother nature, I could neither draw a Venn diagram nor think of any man-made formula that matches such myriad of changes in the twinkling of an eye, as nature is so intricate and unpredictable. A beat of an arctic tern’s wings may create a blizzard that forces a mother polar bear and her sons into their hiding. As my old common sense crumbled into dust, I could only try to perceive nature through my heart.

When I did this, it felt as easy as raising my hand—I did not know the details but could easily accomplish the task. Nature, experienced by my heart, is simple and pure. I guess this had something to do with that we are instinctively connected to it in some special ways. Somehow, this reminded me of a common idea shared by Zen and Taoism: We can only use our hearts to access truth but not words to describe it. When one tries to interpret the greatness and depth of principles with explicit descriptions, he or she has already misrepresented them.

Sometimes I would envy the longevity of the sea and pity the transient lives of mortals, but though we appear to be tiny, we are always hopeful and curious. Our lives may be limited, the ultimate law may be concealed, but our imagination knows no bounds, and the long path to the truth is always open.

I may fail to measure the outcome, but the measurement itself already hints consummation. I will never lose faith on our thoughts and ideas, from Immanuel Kant who acclaimed the value of freedom will to John Nash who prevailed illusions with reasons. We are strange creatures indeed: Though ephemeral and minute in front of the time and space, we are always tied to nature through an invisible, unbreakable bond. I believe just like a drop of water embodies features such as salinity and constituents of the ocean, we and other creatures and the whole nature are but fractals from microscopic to macroscopic scale: "I could be bounded in a nutshell and count myself a king of infinite space."

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《陈欣老师美本留学文书选(CommonApp主文一):科学、自然、哲学》上有2条评论

  1. 太棒了。这篇文书让我想起了我的一个梦。你们有试过海底深潜吗?海底没有光,所有的周边都是黑的,我变成一条小鲸,深潜在海底,什么都看不到也感觉不到,但是我知道我周围是广阔的空间,很大,这种感觉可能和在太空比较像。我一点都不怕,因为不管游到哪那些小生物都会让着我而不是撞到我。直到憋不住气,我从海底向上浮,海水从黑色变成深蓝,再到浅蓝,我看我身下,是空间,我头顶,也是空间,好大好大的空间。然后骤然游到海面,我看向远方,真的是太广阔了,太自由了。那种对空间的描述我实在写不出来,感觉比较类似的描写就是刘慈欣在三体里写的四维碎片,一切都应该是open的。然后第二天整整一天都在恍惚,早上升旗,站在操场上看着天,天就是海面,整个世界都是海底,对面的高楼一点都不高,因为我只要几秒就可以游到那个楼的顶端。

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